yep out of the city

[ibrowmew]

Asher was just waking up (at night) when he heard a noise in the bushes fortunally his eevee had woken up too

[Crazed Lapras]

(Hey Ibrowmew, I have a challenge for ya. I've noticed that most of your posts are rather short. I understand that sometimes this is easier, but short posts are hard for me to reply to. So we are going to work on helping you become more literate. Don't worry, I'll make it worth your effort. If you can post a solid, ttwo paragraph response five different times, I'll give you a moonstone so you can evolve your Eevee into an Umbreon. Sound fair?
I'll use my own post as an example. Try describing the scenery, what Asher or his eevee are thinking, or throw in random little actions like running his finger's through his hair or yawning. Small details make a post come to life, and give your moderator something more to work with.)

The air tonight was cooler than it had been the previous day, just another sign that autumn was on its way. The gentle breeze that blew along the route didn't help the temperature either. The half-moon hung low in the sky, casting a slightly eerie palor across the landscape and throwing a backlight behind the few fluffy clouds, transforming them into ominous floating shadows. Many pokemon were asleep, but still more were just waking up. A Murkrow jeered from somewhere nearby, and a Noctowl answered its challenge.

On the ground and closer to Asher and his pokemon was a ghostly pokemon. A faint glow emitted from her black body as she glided along, her big blue eyes the most noticable feature in the dark. Her passing caused only a gentle rustle of leaves and grass, no louder than the breeze blowing by. The Shuppet was lost in thought, enjoying the clear evening. As she drew near the path, she spotted Asher and his strange umbreon features. Curious, the ghost-type silently stalked the trainer, wondering what he was doing out at this time of night.

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(Now, compare that to the post below.)

A Shuppet who was passing by spotted Asher. She was curious, and decided to follow him, not making a sound.

(Those two short lines say basically the same thing, but are not nearly as interesting to read. They don't set up the mysterious tone like the paragraphs do, and are just down right boring.
Okay, enough of me rambling. Your turn to try.)

[ibrowmew]

(sounds great ill take the challenge (the reason why i don't have long posts is because I'm usually in a hurry) question how do u make the type have different colors?)
Asher had woken up , it was night and he was fully recharged. Asher woke his eevee up by petting it on the ears. Slightly annoyed Asher eevee replied "give me some more time to sleep I'm still tired." No Asher said back get up I'm making breakfast. The eevee ears pricked up at the word breakfast and soon he got up. Asher had started a fire and was making breakfast, Ham sandwiches for himself and putting pokefood in a bowl for eevee.
After eating they heard a rustle in the bushes. They creeped towards the bushes. Parting them they saw nothing confused they walked back to the fire and saw a Pokemon running off with their food. After taking a second to realize it they started running after the Pokemon shouting come back here!

[Crazed Lapras]

(One post down, 4 to go. If you want to make the text a different color use the code [ color=] Type your post here [ /color] without the spaces. You can type in a basic color after the equal sign, or you can put in a color hex code.
So now you've got more detail in your posts. That's great. The next step is to work on your punctuation. You don't have to get all fancy with semi-colins or hypens. You don't even have to use commas. But periods and quotation marks are a must. If you have to, you can read a sentance without any punctuation and it makes sense....
Shuppet laughed quietly to herself watching asher and his eevee you two are quite the pair she said
I don't know about you, but I have to read that twice to make sure I understood it correctly. You mentioned you were often in a hurry, and re-reading things takes up time. So this time I want you to focus on where you place your quotation marks.)

The Shuppet watched Asher and his Eevee chasing their food theif, laughing quietly to herself. She floated forward until she was in front of them. ~You two are an odd pair. I've never seen a human with umbreon features before.~ She said in a soft, lilting voice, staring at Asher with unblinking eyes. ~What are you doing here at this time of evening? Shouldn't you be sleeping? Or were you perhapse looking for a more mysterious foe to battle?~ She twirled in the air, an attempt to provoke Eevee to attack.

[ibrowmew]

"Nope we are allway up at night," Asher replyed. Allthough he was acting calm his mind was racing. He knew that shuppets were goast types and normal type attacks wouldn't hurt goast types. Therefore his eevee's attacks would do no damage. However the pokemon which had taken their food came out from behind a bush, he was watching them for the whole time and had eaten all of their food allready. The pokemon was a munchlax and was known for its love of food.
Suddenly eevee attacked the shuppet with a tackle attack even though Asher hadn' told him to. He jumped right through the body of the shuppet and came out the other side.

[Birdybot]

ooc// Sorry, I won't count that as part of the challenge because it's only two paragraphs long. Also, you can't make Pokémon appear by yourself, so the Munchlax has to go. A mod will decide when a Pokémon is there or isn't. So, instead of 'saw a Pokemon running off with their food, you should write something more like 'Their food had strangely disappeared' if anything, because it wouldn't be fair if members chose the Pokémon appearing to their trainers. However, if you make a wishlist in your PC and post the link in your signiture, mods will every now and then pick a Pokémon from there to appear.

Also, I have some tips for your roleplaying. You should proof-read your post to make sure you got puntuation and capitalization (like 'Asher' and 'Eevee') and use the spell check to do spelling (like 'goast' is spelt 'ghost') I would discribe feelings and thoughts more, and their exact actions. For example;

'Suddenly eevee attacked the shuppet with a tackle attack even though Asher hadn' told him to. He jumped right through the body of the shuppet and came out the other side.'
Could become;

'Without warning, Eevee went through the various options in his mind and felt it best to attack Shuppet; he didn't know Normal moves didn't effect Ghost types! He didn't wait for Asher's order, simply crouching down, tensing his leg muscles ready to spring and eying the Shuppet fixedly. A faint hint of a snarl appeared at his lips as he prepared to attack. Straigtening out his legs, he leapt powerfully through the air. He braced himself for a collision with Shuppet, but, when he felt only the cool moon-kissed grass on the other side of Shuppet, his eyes widened in amazement and shock. What had happened? How did that work?'

See? Vivid descriptions will earn you Moon Stones![/size]

[ibrowmew]

(thanks for the advice and where is crazed lapras? and this post shall replace the one above it ok)

Asher knew many things about goast types. They were hard to catch and normal type attacks would not harm them, because of this and the fact that Asher's eevee was a normal type and only knew normal type attacks they would be helpless if the shuppet attacked. However Asher's eevee did not know this, and annoyed by the shuppet's little twirl he colied his mushles in preperation to attack even though his trainer didn't order him to. Ready to strike the shuppet eevee attacked and flew throught the shuppets body. As he passed through he felt extreme cold and then landed.
Knowing that the shuppet might attack because of this Asher us his ability to morph into a umbreon. was allways painful, Asher felt his bones move and fur grow. However after he morphed his clothes were to large for him and dropped on top of him. After he finished morphing he wiggled out of his clothes and stood ready if the shuppet attacked him.

[Birdybot]

ooc// No idea where Lapras is, but she seems to be coming on a day then being inactive, so I thought I'd save her the trouble of a few threads. I'll count that reply as one of the ones counting towards a Moon Stone. Also, Pokémorphs can't battle, it's really, really unfair on regular humans.

ic// Shuppet's eyes widened. Asher had turned into an Umbreon? Now that was random. What next, flying Caterpie? The Ghost type sighed as she bobbed away in the air, tutting and shaking her head. ~Tut tut. Trainers, trainers, trainers. Always trying to battle. It's a extremely unfair to fight a human turned into a Pokémon, so I'll reject this battle. I was hoping you'd be able to reason with me... that was my little test. To see if you'd ask. But you didn't, so I guess I'll be off-~[/color] she had turned and was preparing to leave when a dark purple form whooshed past, knocking her to the cold ground. She floated up again, looking about. That can't have been a Normal type, otherwise it wouldn't have hurt Shuppet.

True to Shuppet's thinking, the Pokémon was not a Normal type. ~Krooo! Hahaha!~[/color] he cackled. Well, Shuppet's thought of "What next? A flying Caterpie?" had been proven true; the Pokémon was clutching a Caterpie. The Murkrow cackled, the Caterpie he gripped wriggling desperately. ~What's this? A trainer? Hahaha! Bet you wanna save the Caterpie, huh? Well, come get me!~[/color] he shrieked, swooping into the forest. Shuppet glanced at Asher and Eevee. ~Asher, Eevee, come on! Let's go save the Caterpie!~[/color] she called, all dislike gone as she led the way through the trees. She paused, looking back. ~Asher, stay an Umbreon; you can use your nose to track the scent!~[/color] she explained to him. Asher had a choice; attempt to pick out Murkrow's scent within the maze of other scents, and probably get lost but save Caterpie's life, or forget all about them and leave Caterpie to die?[/size]

[ibrowmew]

Asher was also surprised at the fact a Murkrow had sprung up out of nowhere. So he considered the reasons why to help first he loved pokemon and hated to see them suffer. Second if he helped the shuppet might become friends with him. Third this might be very easy to do. After considering the reasons he decided to help the caterpie with the help of shuppet. So he got a small bag out of his big bag and put it on him, this bag contained some clothes. So if he needed to morph and wasn't by his clothes he could use these.Also in the pack was some apples and ham.
Ready to go Asher started sniffing at the air hoping to find a sent. After sniffing for a minute he smelled the murkrow. As soon as he smelled the murkrow he started following the sent. Eevee and shuppet soon followed after him. Soon they had gone through bushes, streams, and past some other pokemon. After a while the scent was very strong by some bushes.

[Birdybot]

ooc// That just about counts. Three down, two to go.
ic// Shuppet was thrilled that Asher was coming with her. Oh, this was fantastic! This trainer might not look like it, but he had a big heart really. Shuppet could tell he was an excelent trainer for Eevee. As the Umbreon who wasn't an Umbreon paused, the Ghost type looked about. ~So this where Murkrow is? Say, Asher, does Eevee have a name? I wish I had a name. Shuppet's just so dull. Anyway, we've a Caterpie to save!~[/color] she said, shaking her head after going off topic. Forcing herself to concentrate on the present, she reached out with tendril from her body and pulled aside a branch.

Caterpie was fainted, being gaurded closely by Murkrow. His eyes widened in surprise at the sight of Asher. ~You came? Bah, never mind. I'll dispose of you quickly. I know you're a trainer. Send out a Pokémon and battle! How about you, little Eevee? Urm... Fluffy? Kekeke, Eevee should be called Puffhead! Well, will the mongrel fight?~[/color] he cackled, laughing mockingly. That was a Murkrow's nature; to always make fun of something's fault. Shuppet eyed Asher. ~Dark types like Murkrow are super effective against me. I won't stand a chance. Asher, you and Eevee fight. Good luck!~[/color] she said, wishing she was stronger.[/size]

[ibrowmew]

(yes i know i need a nickname for my eevee)
Asher and eevee got mad at the fact that murkrow called eevee names. Asher's eyes widened in surprise at the state of the caterpie. Eevee tensed up his leg muscles ready for Asher to tell him to attack.
Asher replied to the murkrow "OK lets fight." After a few seconds he said Eevee use tackle. Eevee was ready and launched into the air his leg muscles propelling him like a rubber band. Flying through the air all eevee thought was i hope i hit him.

[Birdybot]

ooc// That was just Murkrow making fun, you dun have to name Eevee yet. When you do... Vella? Umbri? Tsuli? Oh, and that post isn't counted, you need at least four full lines for a paragraph. Also, 'I' needs to be a capital letter, and if you're doing though, if you put [ i]-thought-[ /i] just take away the spaces, it'll be in italics.

ic// Murkrow pulled a face at Asher. There was no way this Umbreon who wasn't an Umbreon would defeat him! He was... he was Murkrow! Murkrow the awesome! The bird cackled as he fluttered lightly to the ground. The expression he bore suggested an obnoxious character, and he clearly thought that this little Eevee would be no match for him. ~Come on, Puffhead! I'm hungry and you're my dinner!~[/color] he jeered, sending him into another wave of cackles.

The Murkrow wasn't expecting Eevee to move that soon. The Dark type was caught off gaurd, being slammed hard into the ground by the fluffy brown fox. He growled, twittered angrily, but didn't shove Eevee off him. He simply gripped the fox, holding him tight with his wings, and jabbed his beak at him in a very strong Peck attack.[/size]

[ibrowmew]

(hey birdybot i just sent crazed lapras a email asking where she is)
"Yess," thought ,"Asher the attack worked." However he had other thing on his mind what move to choose. Deciding on his move. He made up his mind on tail whip. He called out to eevee eevee use tail whip.

[Birdybot]

ooc// I'm not counting that, either, that's not even one paragraph. Remember, two paragraphs of at least four lines. And I'm pretty certain Lapras hasn't forgotten us or anything, she's just having problems getting on. Family problems is my guess. That or work. Either way, I reckon she'll be on at the weekend. Remember to put what your Pokémon actually does in the post. So rather than just saying 'he used tail whip' you'd describe how. Also, He called out to eevee eevee use tail whip. should be He called out to Eevee "Eevee use Tail Whip!" Note the "speech marks! and CaPiTaL lEtTeRs. Eevee is Eevee's name, so that's why it's a capital letter.

Also, the most important rule in battling in an RP is that YOU NEED TO SAY WHAT HAPPENED WITH MURKROW'S MOVE. You completely left it out your post. What happened? Was Eevee hit by the Peck attack? Did he dodge? Also, Eevee can't dodge every move.

ic// Murkrow cackled loudly. He flew in great circles, enjoying the feel of the crisp night air on his bare feathers as he cut soundlessly through the cool fresh air. His wings dipped as he rose and fell, waiting for the Umbreon kid to instruct his fluffy fox Pokémon. Murkrow clicked his beak impatiently. Why, he could get in a Peck attack in this amount of time! The Dark type landed on the ground, tucking in his feathers. He smoothed a few down; some were sticking up oddly from the light breeze.

Ah, finally. The Eevee seemed to be... using... Tail Whip? As Murkrow watched Eevee's tail swish sharply, he laughed aloud. Pft, that wasn't even a damaging attack! This Murkrow's strategy was to hit all he could, so he didn't really understand what Eevee was exactly doing. He felt his Defense stat slip a little, but hey. Whatever. ~Bah, Puffhead! That didn't hurt! You call that an attack? This is an attack!~[/color] he cawed, flaping his wings. He caught onto a wind and shot like a bullet at Eevee, beak sharp and ready to use Peck. It wasn't likely to miss at all. This was almost certainly going to hit.[/size]

[ibrowmew]

"Oh dear," thought Asher ,"this is not good." Yelling out to Eevee Asher said, "Get out of the way because that is going to hurt if it hits you Eevee." Eevee seeing the murkrow and hearing Asher tried to dodge but the murkrow was to fast and hit Eevee with the peck attack. "Oh no," thought Asher "that had to hurt."

Stunned but still standing Eevee thought , "Ow that hurt." Asher seeing Eevee get up and not faint was glad that he was going to be ok. However Asher had other things to worry about such being that murkrow. Calling out to Eevee he said "Use tackle attack, and give it all you have." Hearing this Eevee ran at the murkrow with all his might trying to hit the murkrow.